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IS MY RESUME REALLY THAT BAD


I have not been getting the responses I had hoped for, so there has to be something wrong with my resume. Can someone please tell me whats wrong with my resume and how can I make it better. Eveyones advice and imput is greatly appreciated. The formatting is a little off, my apologies.

 

 

PROFILE

 

You will find me to be well-spoken, energetic, confident and personable, the type of person on whom you can rely. I possess a wide breath of experience of the type that gives me the versatility to be placed in a number of different contexts. I am motivated with excellent team-building skills seeking an entry-level Administrative/Clerical position.

SKILLS SUMMARY

 

v  Interpersonal Skills

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I only see part of your resume.  For your profile statement, it just seems to be wordy. and it's vague  The profile statement should grab the person's attention.

Here are my comments intertwined.

You will find me to be well-spoken, energetic, confident and personable, the type of person on whom you can rely.

Don't use 2nd person.  It's okay to use 2nd person in a cover letter (e.g. I look forward to hearing from you.), but don't use it on a resume.   Instead of the words above, use keywords such as team player, excellent verbal skills, etc.... I'm really not sure about this statement and what your trying to achieve. you might want to create a bulleted list and pull them out.

 

I possess a wide breath of experience of the type that gives me the versatility to be placed in a number of different contexts.

 

Don't use 1st person. What is your experience or skills? This second statement is vague and doesn't add anything. Need to be more specific.

 

I am motivated with excellent team-building skills seeking an entry-level Administrative/Clerical position.

 

This statement is key. It tells the person what you are looking for. This is good, but it does need some work.  I would use this statement to start out, after revising it. and then combine the two other statements above highlighting some specifics.

 

I hope this helps. 
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And the phrase is "wide BREADTH of experience".  Be very careful with the language you use.  Grammar and spelling count.  Many might count you out on just that item.
I think that the profile statement is something that could be used in your cover letter instead of your resume.  It's also a bit awkward, like you are trying to use language that you are not accustomed to using on a daily basis.  Try simplifying the wording.
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