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My resume
Okay, here it is. | Objective | To utilize all of my skills and use them to benefit the company I work for. | Work Experience | Sales Associate1/2007 - Present Trade Secret, Maplewood, Minnesota § I assisted customers in finding the proper product to suit the needs of their hair and lifestyle. | Service Consultant8/2006 - 11/2006 MN School of Cosmetology, Oakdale, Minnesota § I maintained records of all students attendance. I also set and rearranged appointments for our clients. I helped also to maintain product inventory and other projects as needed. | Food and Beverage Server11/2005 - 2/2006 Perkins Family Restaurant, St. Paul, Minnesota § I welcomed guests and seated them. I also took their beverage and food order. After a guest has left happy ( I will do anything to make sure that happens), I immediately cleaned the table (also pre-bussing). Most of the time I was also responsible for handling the payment transaction. | Accounting Clerk5/2005 - 1/2006 |
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1. Your Objective says nothing. A good Objective will state what kind of position you want. I suggest
Objective A position in Retail Sales
2. You're looking for a job after two months. Your previous two positions lasted three or four months each. What's the story?
3. Remove that bit about being willing to do anything to make the customer happy. Not professional and, maybe it's just my dirty mind, but I thought it had a sexual undertone.
4. Can you recall any commendations you received, or awards?
5. Bluntly, the impression I get is someone who does low level work and does what she's told. Idealy, a resume whould show initiative and a goal in mind. What is your career goal?
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