How is this thank you letterI had an interviews yesterday with a large tech company and I belive this interviews went great! I had more interviews than any of the other candidates, my interviews lasted the longest, and the interviewers seemed very interested in me. I belive I will get an offer and I want to send a thank you note that will help "seal the deal" How does the letter below sound? Any suggestions or changes I should make? Thanks for your help and encouragement. Thank you for taking the time and allowing me to interview for a position in the MS2 organization at xxx. Your job working on submarine systems is fascinating and I would enjoy working on this team. I believe my skills and experience make me an ideal candidate for either the systems integration or software development positions you are looking for. I have five years experience in network administration from my summer internships at the xxx. I also have programming skills in C++ and Java that I gained from my Computer Science degree at the University of South Carolina. Finally, I have team leadership skills from the four years of JROTC I took in high school. The tuition assistance program you and I discussed is a great benefit to working at xxx. I would definitely take advantage of this program because I am interested in furthering my education. I want to learn as much as possible so I that I can continue to be an asset to xxx. I would be a good fit at xxx because I want to work on projects that are challenging and make a significant impact. I want to work with advanced technology and learn as much about technology as I can. I believe xxx is one of the few places where I can accomplish these goals. My desire and ability to learn new skills quickly will make me an asset to xxxx! 1 - Too many "I"' s. It isn' t about you, it' s what you can do for them. Change any sentence that begins with "I". For example, instead of " I believe my skills and experience make me an ideal candidate for either the systems integration or software development positions you are looking for." try "The skills and experience for both the system integration or software development positions are those emphasized in my resume." 2 - Drop the tuition reimbursement comment. If you want to mention benefits, mention them in passing and not in detail. "Your review of the benefits package was appreciated and it appears that your firm offers a good choice of benefits to its employees." 3 - Try bullets to drive home your qualifications. After the sentence in 1 above, list the skills and experience in bullet form. 4 - Hopefully you asked when you could follow up again with them. That should be your closing paragraph. Thanks for the suggestions. I will make some changes. I really wanted to make the comment about the tuition reimbursement because we discussed this in great length and detail. He was a huge advocate of furthering education and I wanted to emphasize that I would like to take advantage of this. I was not given a time deadline either for when I would hear back. I was told 7 to 10 days but nothing specific. I want to thank you again. I got some good news late this afternoon I believe. I got a call from the first manager I spoke with yesterday and he said he wanted to discuss my interview yesterday and gave me his home and cell phone number and said I could call back this weekend. I don' t think he would give me his home phone and tell me to call him over the weekend if he wasn' t very interested. Agree? | |
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